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People believe that public museums or art galleries will be not needed because people now can see historical objects or works using computers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #museums #art #galleries #objects #works #computers
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Some
people
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 believe that the
internet
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 today can be a tool to find things that can be found in
museums
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 or
art
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galleries
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 so that
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 a location is no longer needed. I strongly disagree with the statement and
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 essay will explain the relevant reasons for that. In the era of
technology
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 as it is now, many
people
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 feel facilitated by the presence of the
internet
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. By using search engines, they can easily and quickly find the desired knowledge. One of the things that the
internet
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 can do is to find
information
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 quickly about historical
objects
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 or works of
art
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 that we usually have to see directly in
museums
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 or historical places.
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, if we type the word 'artwork' into a search engine,
then
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 a lot of
information
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 related to the word 'artwork' will appear from various sites including what, where, and when they have been invented. The speed with which
information
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 is obtained makes it easy for
people
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 to find out many things through
technology
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. With the help of the
internet
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, many
people
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 can save time, money, and energy when looking for
information
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 about historical or artistic
objects
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.
However
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, the experience provided by the
internet
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 will not be the same as compared to visiting the site in person.
Museums
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 and
art
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galleries
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 usually cooperate with the government to protect so many
objects
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 and works of the past.
Museums
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 and
art
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galleries
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 certainly cannot be replaced by the presence of
technology
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, because through places that have artistic and historical value,
people
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 can see directly
objects
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 that have many stories behind
it
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them
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. Some historical
objects
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 have been duplicated because the originals have been damaged/lost or stored for safety.
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Nevertheless
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 we can
also
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 see the original historical and artistic
objects
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 in famous
museums
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.
In addition
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, several
museums
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 or
art
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galleries
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also
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 provide learning workshops for visitors.
This
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 experience certainly cannot be obtained if we only look for
information
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 using
the
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apply
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computers. To sum up, the existence of
museums
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 and
art
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galleries
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 cannot be replaced by computers.
People
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 will get real experiences if they see historical
objects
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 in
museums
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 and
technology
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 acts to help
people
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 get
information
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual tours
  • digital technology
  • tactile experience
  • immersive experience
  • cultural hubs
  • educational experiences
  • digital representations
  • preservation of art and culture
  • economic benefits
  • social benefits
  • community engagement
  • accessibility
  • detail and scale
  • originals
  • viewing in person
  • tourism
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