People believe that public museums or art galleries will be not needed because people now can see historical objects or works using computers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
believe that the
internet
today can be a tool to find things that can be found in
museums
or
art
galleries
so that
such
a location is no longer needed. I strongly disagree with the statement and
this
essay will explain the relevant reasons for that. In the era of
technology
as it is now, many
people
feel facilitated by the presence of the
internet
. By using search engines, they can easily and quickly find the desired knowledge. One of the things that the
internet
can do is to find
information
quickly about historical
objects
or works of
art
that we usually have to see directly in
museums
or historical places.
For example
, if we type the word 'artwork' into a search engine,
then
a lot of
information
related to the word 'artwork' will appear from various sites including what, where, and when they have been invented. The speed with which
information
is obtained makes it easy for
people
to find out many things through
technology
. With the help of the
internet
, many
people
can save time, money, and energy when looking for
information
about historical or artistic
objects
.
However
, the experience provided by the
internet
will not be the same as compared to visiting the site in person.
Museums
and
art
galleries
usually cooperate with the government to protect so many
objects
and works of the past.
Museums
and
art
galleries
certainly cannot be replaced by the presence of
technology
, because through places that have artistic and historical value,
people
can see directly
objects
that have many stories behind
it
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. Some historical
objects
have been duplicated because the originals have been damaged/lost or stored for safety.
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we can
also
see the original historical and artistic
objects
in famous
museums
.
In addition
, several
museums
or
art
galleries
also
provide learning workshops for visitors.
This
experience certainly cannot be obtained if we only look for
information
using
the
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computers. To sum up, the existence of
museums
and
art
galleries
cannot be replaced by computers.
People
will get real experiences if they see historical
objects
in
museums
and
technology
acts to help
people
get
information
.

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