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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is predicted that more and more
travelers
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 will opt for spending holiday
traveling
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 locally than visiting international lands.
This
 essay strongly agrees
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 the idea of it because of its cost-effectiveness and local tourism promotion. Travel destinations in one’s country do not require spending a lot of hard-earned money for itineraries
that
is
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 being offered to
people
. Various local airlines and hotels offer various sales promotion enticing
people
 to book a flight and sometimes attached together with decent accommodations.
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, there are a lot of Peso Fare
that is
 being promoted by Philippines Airlines within a certain period of time. With only one peso, you can book a flight bound for famous places like Cebu, Boracay and Palawan.
People
also
 have an option to avail
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 with discounted rates. There are a lot of cheap tours that can be booked for a group of friends and families too. Alongside
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practicality,
people
 boost
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 own country’s tourism by supporting and visiting tourist attractions that
gives
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 leeway for opening more job and business opportunities for the local community.
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, the beach in El Nido, Palawan, Philippines is known locally and internationally for its infamous white and fine sand. It has been
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 suggested place to visit because of its natural beauty and friendly locals who often works as events hosts, vendors or tourist guides. In conclusion,
people
 who are planning to spend their holidays should consider
traveling
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 locally because they would not only spend little but
also
 it enhances their own country’s department of tourism and its local communities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
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