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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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With the development in technology, transportation and communication, it has become easier for students to study in foreign universities. While
this
 opportunity provides many benefits, it
also
 has many disadvantages too. When people travel to other countries for educational purposes, they may have to face many difficult circumstances. They have to manage everything on their own. They may not have the knowledge about the system there.
For example
, when a person visits a new country, he can be overcharged for a taxi, as they have no idea about the fare there. It can
also
 be possible that they find it tough to get a suitable residence.
Moreover
, to afford their college and tuition fees, they may have to work part-time which can have an adverse effect on their grades and studies.
For instance
, according to a survey, most of the part-time workers in Canada are immigrants who are University students. Travelling abroad to pursue a degree has many advantages. Primarily, students can choose from a vast number of courses. Universities in developed countries like the USA, Canada and England offer a wide range of professional courses, which might not be available in developing countries.
Furthermore
, the opportunity to study in foreign universities provide them exposure and enhances their interaction skills.
For instance
, when a person interacts with people from different backgrounds and culture it enriches them with knowledge. It can be concluded that while there are many pros and cons to the facility of studying abroad, an individual should take the decision by considering all factors, whether he wants to study abroad or in his own country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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