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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Many businesses have discovered that new employees often lack
communication
skills
.
This
 can be attributed to an excessive
focus
 on professional
skills
 in college and a weak foundation in the language since childhood. These issues can be resolved through extensive reforms in the
education
 system. The primary
focus
 of most colleges and universities is to train
students
 for technical tasks. There are almost no teachers and courses in
communication
skills
 since these are considered irrelevant for engineers, accountants, and doctors.
Consequently
, many fresh graduates have no idea how to communicate with their colleagues.
Moreover
, the
education
 system from elementary studies to university
focus
 on science and mathematics as these subject are supposed to build careers. Languages, which for the core of
communication
skills
, are considered mere necessary evils that need to be crammed. The
students
 prefer to just pass the exams in English, French, German and Latin and are expected to excel in sciences.
This
 creates a poor foundation for
communication
skills
 and most new employees find it impossible to talk to their teammates. I think
this
 issue can only be resolved through a radical restructuring of the
education
 system. Boards of
education
,
such
 as the CBSE in India, along with schools and teachers need to inform
students
 and parents about the utility of
communication
 in building strong careers.
Moreover
, the courses in literature should be made more interactive so that the
students
 abandon the habit of cramming.
This
 can be done through videos and role-plays. Colleges should allocate subjects dedicated to improving the speaking, writing, listening and reading
skills
 of
students
. They should be encouraged to write letters, essays on contemporary topics. In conclusion, the problem of poor
communication
skills
 has cropped up due to the extreme
focus
 on technical
skills
 and poor foundation in literature.
This
 can be solved through the active collaboration of educational institutions, teachers, parents, and
students
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interpersonal skills
  • cooperative skills
  • face-to-face interaction
  • digital communication
  • non-verbal cues
  • active listening
  • education system
  • technical knowledge
  • soft skills
  • remote work
  • work environment
  • comprehensive training programs
  • workshops
  • teamwork
  • role-playing scenarios
  • open communication
  • collaborative efforts
  • educational institutions
  • curriculums
  • hybrid work models
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