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Many today feel that most urgent problems can only be solved by international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Solving pressing global issues seem to be better if it is done by a joint effort of every country, according to some;
however
, I partially agree with the statement as some problems only managed nationally. In
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 my views shall support in the following paragraphs.
First
 and foremost, global warming is an urgent problem that requires a multi-level approach.
This
 is because even though one country has zero carbon emission,
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 could be affected
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 the uncontrolled pollution of
neighboring
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 nations as well. To illustrate
this
, Finland is eco-friendly, but
this
 place has been dangerously hit by global warming
such
 as heavy snowfall, prolonged summer and so on,
this
 has occurred due to green gases have been produced by some Asian regions.
Therefore
, a collective initiative is highly recommended. Despite the fact that
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 there are some issues
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 to be entirely controlled within the state even it makes damage
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. Terrorism
that is
 a global threat, which has been identified as a
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 program in some part of the world. Due to
this
, under no
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 the government should act to
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 and start taking necessary steps to counteract
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 since the devastating consequences do not limit
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 one place.
Thus
, it is
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 that how to handle these kinds of problems is purely determined by the authority of the nation, hardly, others can get
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 in their home affairs. In conclusion, there are some
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 that having an international effort could prevent the majority of the world’s problems, I support
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 view to
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 extent. It is recommended that every nation must play its own role both at
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 and global level to encounter against evils.
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