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Prison is the best punishment for criminals. Do you agree or disagree?

#prison #punishment #criminals
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To have
criminals
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 punished,
prisons
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 are believed to be the best option. I partially agree with
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 idea that the best
punishment
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 for
criminals
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is
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 prison as my own perspective is that it forces them to experience both mental and physical sufferings, as well as guilt;
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,
prisons
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 are not the best. The
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 reason why I am on the side of
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 idea is that
prisons
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 make villains feel anguish and isolated. Having been staying behind bars for years, they cannot live freely or do things they want but obey the guards’ rules, leading to irritation.
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, not only in
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 but
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 when
criminals
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 are free, it is challenging for them to reintegrate into the community because people do not want to socialize with those who have criminal records. Only by having been behind bars,
criminals
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 can feel
isolation
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.
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,
prisons
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 are not the best
punishment
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 due to
its
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 limitations. Some
criminals
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 who have been released are still inclined to relapse.
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, citizens’ taxes contributing to improving
prisons
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 are so wasteful that those people are raising the outlaws.
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,
although
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prisons
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 make
criminals
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 undergo
punishment
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, they are not the best option. In conclusion, I just agree with
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 idea partially. I firmly suggest that
criminals
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 should be incarcerated in order to undergo anguish and isolation, but
prisons
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 should not be regarded as the best
punishment
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.
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