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Prison is the best punishment for criminals. Do you agree or disagree?

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To have
criminals
 punished,
prisons
 are believed to be the best option. I partially agree with
this
 idea that the best
punishment
 for
criminals
is
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 prison as my own perspective is that it forces them to experience both mental and physical sufferings, as well as guilt;
however
,
prisons
 are not the best. The
first
 reason why I am on the side of
this
 idea is that
prisons
 make villains feel anguish and isolated. Having been staying behind bars for years, they cannot live freely or do things they want but obey the guards’ rules, leading to irritation.
Moreover
, not only in
prisons
,
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 but
also
 when
criminals
 are free, it is challenging for them to reintegrate into the community because people do not want to socialize with those who have criminal records. Only by having been behind bars,
criminals
 can feel
isolation
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.
However
,
prisons
 are not the best
punishment
 due to
its
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 limitations. Some
criminals
 who have been released are still inclined to relapse.
Furthermore
, citizens’ taxes contributing to improving
prisons
 are so wasteful that those people are raising the outlaws.
Therefore
,
although
prisons
 make
criminals
 undergo
punishment
, they are not the best option. In conclusion, I just agree with
this
 idea partially. I firmly suggest that
criminals
 should be incarcerated in order to undergo anguish and isolation, but
prisons
 should not be regarded as the best
punishment
.
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