People spend less time at home than they used to. What are the reasons for ‎this change and what are the effects on society and individuals?‎

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In the modern world, the way of spending

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with

people

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has significantly ‎changed than was decades ago.

People

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spend more

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outside of the

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and ‎

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is because of several factors, I think.‎ Nowadays, many

people

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are getting busy than ever before. There are many ‎reasons cause

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situation, and one of them is advance in technology. Due to ‎the rapid development of technology, sometimes

people

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are getting struggled with ‎their jobs more than ever before in order to keep their steps with the latest ‎technological advancement.

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, my sister who works at a commercial ‎company as an accountant

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has been forced to work for extra

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in the latest ‎months because their company introduce a new ERP system for their daily ‎financial and business activity.

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, social media sites and other ‎information resources allow

people

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to engage in various communities, groups, ‎and open ways to involve in different activities.

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people

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become ‎interested in

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in different kind of events and willing to spend

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with ‎them.

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factors make

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lack

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stay at

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.‎

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, spending less

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home

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might lead to some negative ‎effects both on individuals and society. Spending less

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with their family ‎makes the connection between family members less closely. Talking, caring and ‎having

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together helps

people

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to build a strong warm connection with family ‎members. But spending most of their

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outside of the

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makes

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‎have less

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for their family.

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situation may lead to some negative effects in ‎future ,especially for children. If the parents do not spend enough

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for

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their ‎children and do not give them enough care, children become to feel like they are ‎rejected and it may lead to become with negative behaviour in their future. If the ‎number of

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with negative behaviour

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increasing, it would definitely bring some ‎negative impact on society.‎ In conclusion, spending

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outside of the

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is due to different reasons for ‎

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. Having less

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home

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might be some kind of fun or pleasure for ‎some

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,but it might be lead to an unwanted negative outcome in future

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‎as affecting children's behaviour in a negative way.‎

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People spend less time at home than they used to. What are the reasons for ‎this change and what are the effects on society and individuals?‎

Your opinion

some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider reoads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and giver your opinion.

Some people say History is one of most important school subjects other people think that, in today world,subject like science and technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You have recently started a new job. Write a letter to a friend about your new job. In your letter: - Describe the job and the company. - Explain how you feel about the job. - Discuss your future plans.

Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.