People spend less time at home than they used to. What are the reasons for ‎this change and what are the effects on society and individuals?‎

In the modern world, the way of spending
time
with
people
has significantly ‎changed than was decades ago.
People
spend more
time
outside of the
home
and ‎
this
is because of several factors, I think.‎ Nowadays, many
people
are getting busy than ever before. There are many ‎reasons cause
this
situation, and one of them is advance in technology. Due to ‎the rapid development of technology, sometimes
people
are getting struggled with ‎their jobs more than ever before in order to keep their steps with the latest ‎technological advancement.
For example
, my sister who works at a commercial ‎company as an accountant
,
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has been forced to work for extra
time
in the latest ‎months because their company introduce a new ERP system for their daily ‎financial and business activity.
Moreover
, social media sites and other ‎information resources allow
people
to engage in various communities, groups, ‎and open ways to involve in different activities.
As a result
,
people
become ‎interested in
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in different kind of events and willing to spend
time
with ‎them.
Such
factors make
people
lack
time
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stay at
home
.‎
On the other hand
, spending less
time
at
home
might lead to some negative ‎effects both on individuals and society. Spending less
time
with their family ‎makes the connection between family members less closely. Talking, caring and ‎having
time
together helps
people
to build a strong warm connection with family ‎members. But spending most of their
time
outside of the
home
makes
people
‎have less
time
for their family.
This
situation may lead to some negative effects in ‎future ,especially for children. If the parents do not spend enough
time
for
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their ‎children and do not give them enough care, children become to feel like they are ‎rejected and it may lead to become with negative behaviour in their future. If the ‎number of
people
with negative behaviour
are
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increasing, it would definitely bring some ‎negative impact on society.‎ In conclusion, spending
time
outside of the
home
is due to different reasons for ‎
people
. Having less
time
at
home
might be some kind of fun or pleasure for ‎some
people
,but it might be lead to an unwanted negative outcome in future
such
‎as affecting children's behaviour in a negative way.‎
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