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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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In
this
 globalized world, an increasing number of students decide to learn overseas and many think it is attractive;
on the other hand
, some people choose to study locally. In the following essay, I would argue both positive and negative sides of
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 learning.
First
 of all, choosing
foreign
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 university might be advantageous because the students can experience a lot of new things, and it will be useful in the future.
For example
, as they experience new culture and perspective, they will be very attractive persons in
this
 increasingly globalized world.
This
 means
a
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 possibility of getting into a valued company will increase.
Furthermore
, as they might be able to obtain
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 language even
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in
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 expert level, it
widen
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 the choice of occupation. To sum up, learning abroad helps people to have a better life.
Second
 of all,
on the other hand
, there is a drawback of studying
oversea
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. Since the students have to take classes and have some conversations in
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 language, it might limit their performance.
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, in a class that contains a lot of
discussion
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, the foreign learners cannot behave
lively
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 and utilize an opportunity that they are in the university.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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