There have been many inventions in the human history, such as the wheel. Some people think the most important thing is the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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History has undergone numerous changes, for the better and for the worse, just like the growth of a human being. Years ago, the birth of penicillin was considered the most important invention that rescued the life of millions of people
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world-wide
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. For the
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, there was no scene of many individuals dying in an epidemic, and children crying helplessly. Humans were just satisfied for a short
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and asked for more. There came the appearance of cars which transformed their
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world to the fullest extent as some
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. There was no more rain threat, icy attacks from the sky and physical pains each
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humans happened to taste in their visit to a far-away relative, but they were comfortably cocooned in a
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shelter of a metal-made king. Cars dominated everywhere from the smallest to the biggest territory
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and was seen to symbolize the utmost liberty and privacy of
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human world. And now
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mode begins to fade away under the control of the smartest machine of humans,
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computer. Internet flattens the world, breaking all social barriers between individuals. Here at home, a person could know and search
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he wants
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just a click. Their friends are
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everywhere from Africa to Asia. For that, some claim
Internet
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is the most important invention in human history. But they fail to look back on the history again to know that there is always something better coming along. It is just
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, patience, creativity, passion, assiduity and objectivity that a more giant invention is emerging in the nearest future. That day will come whether you believe it or not.
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