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Art is considered an important part of society as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think it is important for children to be taught art? Do you think children should be encourage to focus on art rather than other subjects?

#art #part #society #expression #culture #children #focus #subjects
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Nowadays, not only
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 considered a
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 of communication. There are several factors which can have a great impact on the
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's education with
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 and I agree that all of the
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 which we teach to our
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 are as important as each other. In today's world, many
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pre-planned aim's. Some basic
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 are required for them to improve their knowledge. I believe that
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 to boost our young generations' creativity and develop them and it can help them to develop other skills in the future.
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 of learning and teaching other
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 for the underages. Many teacher's combine the various
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 and games to make them attractive for them.
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, numbers can be easily taught if parents mix
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 with painting and learn them to their
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.
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 is one of the important things to teach to our
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, other sides of the education must be considered as well as each other. Our brains are divided into main part and another half of the every one require mathematical education for development. As result, both
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 and mathematic are needed to teach
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the new generation and lead them to complete person. In conclusion,
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 is one of the important
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 which plays a vital role
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 both learnings of the
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 and teaching of the parents. In my opinion, though many of the
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 side of the brain development must be considered
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