Nowadays, there are more and more people suffering from health problems. Why people choose unhealthy lifestyle? How could we resolve this problem?

Farming is
also
known as a backbone of a country, which is occupying by commercial
centres
on a large scale.
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essay will discuss the main effects of growing business
centres
including, deterioration of ecosystem and shortage of
food
for people and
this
essay will
also
suggested
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two main solutions including, restriction on
trade
centres
and
land
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owners
in the forthcoming paragraph. The expansion of industrial
centres
is detrimental
for
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ecosystems.
Trade
centres
have lots of equipment of amenities like air conditioner and electricity generators, which may cause the emission of greenhouse gases. Greenhouse gasses are essential in sustaining a habitable temperature for the planet but
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of these gases is detrimental for life on earth. The conspicuous step toward
this
deleterious effect should be
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prohibition of commercial core on countryside
land
and mend
this
act as a law.
For instance
, as per a survey conducted by the Times of India, emissions of greenhouse gases had been increased by 80% from a number of growing business
scenters
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centres
.
Furthermore
, an immense number of
trade
centres
on the
land
of farming can emerge the
food
crisis. If there
are
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no
land
for farming
then
cultivation of
food
product will be difficult. As for the solution,
government
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should enforce a law of interdiction on selling and purchasing of farming
land
for both
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land
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landowners
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owners
as well as commercial centre
owners
. A report published by
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corporation authority stated that a countryside area of Maharashtra, in which 67%
farmers
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had sold their lands to commercial centre
owners
, had been facing
food
shortages. To conclude, it is absolute that increasing numbers of
trade
centres
are hazardous for
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and for humans
thus
government should take strong and rigorous actions from time to time.
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Linking words are very important in your essay.

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  • firstly
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  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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