Nowadays, there are more and more people suffering from health problems. Why people choose unhealthy lifestyle? How could we resolve this problem?
Farming is
also
known as a backbone of a country, which is occupying by commercial centres
on a large scale. This
essay will discuss the main effects of growing business centres
including, deterioration of ecosystem and shortage of food
for people and this
essay will also
suggested
two main solutions including, restriction on Change the verb form
suggest
trade
centres
and land
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landowners
owners
in the forthcoming paragraph.
The expansion of industrial centres
is detrimental for
ecosystems. Change preposition
to
Trade
centres
have lots of equipment of amenities like air conditioner and electricity generators, which may cause the emission of greenhouse gases. Greenhouse gasses are essential in sustaining a habitable temperature for the planet but extra
Add an article
the extra
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amount
mount
of these gases is detrimental for life on earth. The conspicuous step toward Correct your spelling
amount
this
deleterious effect should be stringent
prohibition of commercial core on countryside Add an article
the stringent
a stringent
land
and mend this
act as a law. For instance
, as per a survey conducted by the Times of India, emissions of greenhouse gases had been increased by 80% from a number of growing business scenters
.
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centres
Furthermore
, an immense number of trade
centres
on the land
of farming can emerge the food
crisis. If there are
no Change the verb form
is
land
for farming then
cultivation of food
product will be difficult. As for the solution, government
should enforce a law of interdiction on selling and purchasing of farming Add an article
the government
land
for both agriculture
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agricultural
land
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landowners
owners
as well as commercial centre owners
. A report published by food
corporation authority stated that a countryside area of Maharashtra, in which 67% Correct article usage
the food
farmers
had sold their lands to commercial centre Change preposition
of farmers
owners
, had been facing food
shortages.
To conclude, it is absolute that increasing numbers of trade
centres
are hazardous for ecosystem
and for humans Correct article usage
the ecosystem
thus
government should take strong and rigorous actions from time to time.Submitted by upen.pathak8 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite