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Mass media, including TV, radio and newspapers, have a big influence on to what extent you agree or disagree

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The system of communication that makes
news
 and entertainment accessible to the majority of
people
 through books, newspapers, radio, television and the Internet is called "
mass
media
". It has the power to change the thinking of
people
. I fully agree with the writer’s notion and the reasons behind my claim are described in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, how does
mass
media
 influence
people
's ideology.
Firstly
, whatever the
mass
media
 represents to the public is from reliable sources, and
that is
 why
people
 believe in the
media
, be it newspapers, television or radio.
Secondly
,
mass
media
 represents visual impact and helps
people
 to be a direct witness of any kind of
news
.
As a result
, viewing any report allows
people
 to shape their point of view on a particular topic.
In addition
, due to advances in communication
media
,
people
 are now able to find out the correct information if they are mistaken by a misadventure
unfortunately
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.
On the other hand
, it is undoubtedly the fact that the
media
 has the ability to lead the ideology,
although
 sometimes some spam
news
 leads
people
 to any unpleasant
news
 that
people
 can get through false belief.
For example
, according to an article in India, 15% of
news
 reports must be from fake
media
 and
this
 can affect our thinking. In conclusion,
although
 it is undeniably true that newspapers, television and radio all these sources can lead our ideology but there are some sources
which
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that
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 represent fake data to the
people
.
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