Some people say that we should not encourage sport games among schools because they lead to competition rather than cooperation. To what extend do you agree or disagree with?
Nowadays, every school and college are focusing on increased sports and cultural activities.
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not only increases the student's focus but Linking Words
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helps them to find their hidden talent. Linking Words
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, some people think that Correct word choice
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students are becoming more competitive rather than Linking Words
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co-operative
. In my view, it could have both positive and negative Correct your spelling
cooperative
impact
on a child. We will discuss both views in the essay.
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impacts
one
hand, I think these increased sports activities make the student more competitive as well Use synonyms
teaches
them how to develop teamwork. Correct word choice
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basketball
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in basketball
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teaches Use synonyms
players
to develop skills as well Use synonyms
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as co-ordination
co-ordination
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coordination
players
to pass the ball and shoot the basket. Use synonyms
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game
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one
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a
player
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one-player
game
, everyone in the Use synonyms
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in order to win. Use synonyms
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this
, playing more sports makes them develop sportsmanship, determination, teamwork, cooperation with other teammates etc.
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On the other hand
, I think some people take the Linking Words
game
to be competitive and do not learn anything from the Use synonyms
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one
player is very talented and if he thinks that he just wants to beat other Use synonyms
players
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he will never be able to learn anything from the Linking Words
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. I had Use synonyms
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friend, who was extremely talented in playing basketball Use synonyms
while
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others
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other
players
in the team were average. In Use synonyms
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he tried to carry the Use synonyms
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by himself and did not pass to his teammates. We lost the Use synonyms
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because he never took help from his own team. Because, he did not know how to coordinate with his team, he was just competing against other Use synonyms
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, there are some disadvantages Linking Words
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having more gaming activities it has more advantages. If a student plays more games there are more chances of him/her learning different good traits.Change preposition
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