Some people think that the main factors influencing a child’s development these days are things such as television, friends, and music. Others believe that the family still remains more important. Discuss both views and give your opinio
Undoubtedly, the family has
significant
role Add an article
a significant
to
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in
child
behaviour and holistic development while other external factors which are irrefutable Use synonyms
such
as friends,television and music Linking Words
has
a Change the verb form
have
smiliar
impact on Correct your spelling
similar
child
growth, others claim that Use synonyms
these
factor has a greater influence to the family.
On the one hand,In Change the determiner
this
initial
stage of Add an article
the initial
Use synonyms
child
learns and absorbs more from their Add an article
a child
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parents
behaviour and family Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
enviourment
. Correct your spelling
environment
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result
the family has Add a comma
,result
a
biggest role Change the article
the
to
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in
nuture
the Correct your spelling
nurture
child
brain and growth.
For Instances, If the Use synonyms
parents
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are respect
their elders and act Change the verb form
respect
responsible
towards society, Replace the word
responsibly
child
Use synonyms
intimate
their Change the verb form
intimates
parents
and behave like their Use synonyms
parents
whereas If Use synonyms
parents
Use synonyms
are do
some illegal activities, Change the verb form
are doing
child
learn negative things from Use synonyms
parents
Use synonyms
such
as Linking Words
bulgaring
,selling guns and drugs and other illegal activities.
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bulging
Consequently
,Moral values and good behaviour comes from the internal family Linking Words
enviourment
which lead to Correct your spelling
environment
be
a good Change the verb form
being
citixen
and human being.
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citizen
On the other hand
, The outside factors Linking Words
such
as t.v music, friends and Linking Words
socitey
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society
has
a positive and negative impact on the Change the verb form
have
child
.The good and Use synonyms
age appropriate
content and music has Add a hyphen
age-appropriate
postive
effect on Correct your spelling
positive
Use synonyms
child
brain as wells as good friends circle provide a Change the noun
child's
peers
to peer learning which has a great impact on Correct the article-noun agreement
peer
child
development whereas negative content Use synonyms
shown
by t.v Add the auxiliary verb
is shown
such
as ad which intriguing to know things before the age of Linking Words
child
Use synonyms
likeas
sex education, Correct your spelling
likes
like
discriminaton
. Correct your spelling
discrimination
Also
, poor society and friend circle lead to demoralised Linking Words
child
confidence and Use synonyms
child
learning because there is Use synonyms
higher
chance of leanings Add an article
a higher
the
bad habitats and slang languages . For eg If the Correct article usage
apply
child
faced bullies by their friend, the Use synonyms
child
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face
a lot's of Change the verb form
faces
phychological
problems and low confidence whereas children who lives in slum areas, Correct your spelling
psychological
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apply
the
want to earn money Correct your spelling
they
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at on
on
early age and they are not wanted to study and focused on Correct your spelling
an
career
.
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their career
recatipulate
, The outside and internal Correct your spelling
recapitulate
enviourments
are equal Correct your spelling
environments
role
for Change the noun form
roles
child
growth but It's Use synonyms
nessecary
to Correct your spelling
necessary
parents
and society provide a safe and good Use synonyms
enviourment
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environment
infont
the Correct your spelling
infant
in font
child
which Use synonyms
promote
the Change the verb form
promotes
child
to a great human being and citizen.Use synonyms
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