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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of traveling for the traveller?

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Nowadays travelling
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 more popular than ever in the
last
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 century. In
this
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travel
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 and describe its advantages for our everyday lives. The main cause of
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numbers
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 of
traveller
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travellers
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 is the improvement
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 transportation.
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 is because now we have aeroplane rather than camel or even ship that
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 a very long time to reach your destination. The best example of
this
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 would be in the past if someone would
travel
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 from Saudi Arabia to China it took them more than three months by ship
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 these days could be less than 7 hours by plane.
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of
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it
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, many
people
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 tend to
travel
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 and have the ability to explore other countries because travelling
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easier than before.
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, none of
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 could
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happening
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 without the aeroplane. There are several advantages to travelling to other countries. First , it is an incredible way to learn about various cultures when you
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 .
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 is because
people
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 get to learn a new language and interact with new and interesting
people
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 .
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 , the best example of
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when
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people
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travel
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 to London and visit some museums there and see the remarkable arts that reflect the society,
people
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 become more aware of customs , traditions and skin colours which are unique to a country and need to be respected by all .
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, the second benefit is relaxation stress.
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 is because some
people
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 work in
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 a tough environment that has a lot of tasks to accomplish
with
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 a very long period of
times
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time
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 each day.
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 , the teachers who especially teach younger students in
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elementary school ,
they
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face many
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 and stress because dealing with children is not that easy to handle so they need to have a holiday. As
result
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,
this
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 trip makes them feel more calm and comfortable . In conclusion , more and more
people
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 travelling because of the amazing transportation we have these days and
people
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 can afford it. There are some benefits of travelling
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,
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learn
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learning
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 about different societies and contact with new
people
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.

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Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present but lack clarity and depth. Ensure that the introduction effectively introduces the topic and the conclusion provides a strong summarization of the main points.
Task Achievement
The response addresses the question but lacks depth. Ensure that the ideas are developed more comprehensively and provide clear and detailed examples to support the points.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economy pricing
  • Cultural exchange
  • International business
  • Heritage sites
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Global citizen
  • Study abroad
  • Standard of living
  • Destination
  • Itinerary
  • Online bookings
  • Digital nomad
  • Bucket list
  • Sustainable travel
  • Eco-tourism
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