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Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion?

#money #time
What would it be the best situation for a person, making considerable amounts of money but having less leisure
time
 or owning more
time
 to enjoy by having a reduced amount of wealth?
This
 essay will discuss both scenarios and provide reasons that support each statement.
To begin
 with, having a good flow of money makes our lives easier since most human needs can be satisfied through money
such
 as owning a house, having access to good food and being able to purchase whatever you like as well as visiting any place around the world, staying in the best hotels, going to nice restaurants and shops and so on.
However
, if an individual is able to afford all these benefits but anyhow can enjoy them due to the lack of occasion,
instead
 of finding joy and satisfaction
this
 fact might lead to frustration, owning the means that let you obtain all the things you like but being not able to enjoy all you could since you don't have a moment for it. On the other side, having lots of
time
 grants you the opportunity to travel, to spend
time
 with the people you love and being able to perform activities you like
such
 as hobbies and sports might look like the perfect life,
nonetheless
, what if you don't have the monetary resources that allow you to make all those activities come true? it will
also
 lead you to frustration having
time
 to do what you want and not being able to do it since income is the key that opens all those pretty doors. In conclusion, having wealth and not having occasion as well as having space but not having fund both circumstances could be the reason for an individual to fall into frustration. Both of them are extreme points. The joy of life resides in finding a balance between possessing the means that gets you access to the things you like and owning the moment to do it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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