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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

Some people think it is mỏe important to spend money on roads and motor ways than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that more funds should be expenditure on roads and motorways rather than on public transportation. In my opinion, I believe that both thoroughfare and public shipment electronics have a vital role to play in modern society, and
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 should be equally invested in.
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 with, roadways that have good quality will increase the level of safety and reduce traffic congestion.
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, in many cities and provinces in Vietnam, the number of subway accidents has been ever-increasing because there are a lot of holes in the trail's surface.
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 is evident that the authorities should spend money improving road wiring to ensure the safety of people.
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, building wider roads and more motorways in big cities like Ha Noi or Ho Chi Minh City, where traffic congestion is still a major problem, will help to increase road capacity. It means that there will be more space for a large number of travellers.
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, better public transportation chips are beneficial for the environment and people who do not have private transit. It is more convenient to commute by private service rather than waiting for buses and trains, which might be limited in terms of route and time. In fact, some modes of public shipping like subways produce fewer pollutants than cars and other private movements. Nowadays, developing countries with overpopulation will lead to an increase the traffic density.
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, building more public shipping chips is the best solution to
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 major problem. In conclusion, I think the government should spend money on buses, trains and undergrounds because these transport not only have less pollution but
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 fulfil the demands of billions of commuters in the world.

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Grammar
Improve grammatical accuracy and precision. Some sentences contain inaccuracies (e.g., 'subway accidents,' 'road wiring,' 'public transportation chips').
Content
Use clearer and more relevant examples to support points. For instance, provide specific data or study findings related to road and public transport investments.
Vocabulary
Enhance vocabulary range and precision. Avoid repetitive use of words and phrases; instead, employ a variety of synonyms and expressions.
Structure
The essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively summarize the main points.
Content
The arguments present a balanced discussion on both sides of the topic, showing an understanding of the issue's complexity.
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