Some people believe that unpaid community service should be c compulsory part of high school programme(for example working for charity ,improving the neighbourhood, teaching sports to younger children) To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Community services have a significant role in our
society
and
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. For
this
reason, it should be implemented as a mandatory subject in high schools.
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essay will discuss the benefits of social work and provide reasons that support why it should be implemented in secondary programs.
First
of all, when communal work is taught at a young age, it will
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awareness and a sense of belonging and responsibility on teenagers towards their
society
. Participating in acts
such
as helping
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, tutoring kids or helping with the improvement of the place they live in, will give them a closer sight of what is needed to be done and how they can contribute as individuals through their jobs in the near future which
consequently
will significate an upgrade of the life's quality and opportunities for all the individuals and an improvement of the
society
they dwell in.
Secondly
, working to help their
society
to evolve and become better will not only benefit others
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it will
also
increase the youngsters' self-
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esteem
and self-perception since it grants them the opportunity of feeling useful as
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being and realize they and their actions play an important role in the world we all live in.
For
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a kid
that is
feeling desvalorization due to external circumstances will now
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perceive
himself as someone worthy
that is
capable of helping other people to achieve their goals and improve their lives.
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conclusion, Community service will
possitively
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positively
impact not only the
individials
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individuals
and
sociaty
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society
that is
receiving the help but
also
the individuals who are providing the help.
That is
why participating in activities
such
as social work and extracurricular activities in which teenagers have the opportunity of getting
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in tasks that
contributes
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to the improvement
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their
society
must be a mandatory requirement in all high schools curriculum.
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