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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? is the traditional music of country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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Music
 is
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 universal gift and its power to connect people is without question. It is quite evident that we have numerous types of
music
 in the world today, Rock, folk, EDM's, jazz, classical, to name but a few. Not only is
this
 art perennial in our world, but
also
 fills the atmosphere with vim and vigour. Let us delve deeper and examine the importance of
music
,
also
 compare the international
music
 with the
tradional
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traditional
 in the
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subsequent
 paragraphs. To embark with, there are ample shreds of evidence to prove the need
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music
.
Firstly
, when, today, 90% of our day is occupied by our work lives, we can rely on
music
 to combat stress, Adding to
this
, it can be an
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 to
loneliless
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loneliness
 and anxiety.
Music
 improves your health and wellbeing. A study in Harvard has shown that relaxing
music
 may lower blood pressure and heart rate after physical exertion.
Moreover
, the joy you get from
music
 will help lift your spirits and those of everybody else involved. It is a misfortune that,
the
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international
music
 has eclipsed
the
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tradional
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traditional
music
. It has been gaining
widesread
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widespread
 acceptance.
Furthermore
, it is true to some extent that the international brings modernity,
however
, the
tradional
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traditional
music
 brings nationalistic feelings and the legacy of the past generation. I am in favour of the latter.
Thus
,
tradional
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traditional
music
 holds
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 role and must be embraced by one and all. To conclude, it can be stated that, international
music
 has poised the art but
tradional
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traditional
 is antiquity.
Also
,
tradional
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traditional
music
 must be the one encroaching upon and dominating
the
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international art.
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