Subjects like arts, music and drama are more important than other school subjects and therefore should be given more time in the calendar. Do you agree or disagree?

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musical

instruments

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and

film are getting priority in the study

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day by day than

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other institutions subjects and it should be immersed more time to the students. From my perspective,

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proposition is not completely true. It seems undeniable that people have to take arts,

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music

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and dramas to

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acquire

recreational knowledge.

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phenomenon which is not fruitful in

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. Taking

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of another subject in school can help them to execute any things in any situations.

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consideration

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to grab perfectly.

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sided knowledge can lead him

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a logical life.

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, if a man

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every idea he can do the entire tasks of a company.

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, if a person

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only arts or music he can render it perfectly.

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, if a person

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everything he can support his country in

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disaster situations

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Conversely

, a man

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only arts, music or drama to represent his country properly.

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, a human learning various type of knowledge

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voluntary

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for his province.

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, he has to take only

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subject to represent his state perfectly while he is travelling. In conclusion,

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various

types of

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should be needed to execute all things properly.

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, to create a smooth operation of any Institute there is no alternative way of

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learning to provide

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smooth support of the country.

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Subjects like arts, music and drama are more important than other school subjects and therefore should be given more time in the calendar. Do you agree or disagree?

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