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Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarket. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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There are 2 factors involved when purchasing our groceries online or in person at the store, the quality of the food and the moment needed to do so.
This
 essay will discuss what influences people to choose one option above the other. On one side, Shopping online saves you a considerable amount of
time
 as well as allows you to save some cash. It might take you around 10 to 15 minutes to buy your groceries online since you can do it from the comfort of your home or your office desk and get it delivered within the
next
 hour which signifies that there is more space left to enjoy in hobbies, spend
time
 with friends and family or even have more
time
 to work on your professional projects. Most of the times coupons and discounts are offered online so cyber-shoppers
also
 get the benefit of saving cash.
Therefore
 people with tight schedules will prefer purchasing their aliments on the web and save their valuable
time
 while they get discounts.
On the other hand
, in-person shopping allows you to select and check the quality of the products before you pay for them. Commuting to the store might cost you more
time
 and money spent on gas or transportation ,
however
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 if you are a food lover and enjoy touching and having the whole experience while shopping
then
this
 option is totally worth it since it gives them the freedom to see and sense what you are choosing.
For example
, a tomato might look really good in pictures but it might not be the same tomato that you receive when you shop online while when attending the store you are able to select live what looks most attractive to you. To sum up, Shopping online has its advantages
such
 as receiving discounts and saving money
likewise
 shopping in person provides you with the whole experience of contemplating the products right in front of your eyes,
therefore
 you are actually paying for what you selected. In fact, it is a matter of priorities that influences people to choose one way of shopping or the other, being it either
time
 or quality,
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