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Human Activity Has Had A Negative Impact On Plants And Animals Around The World

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There are plenty of human activities on the planet that has a tremendous impact on plants and animals. It is important that we identify those activities and avoid any detrimental repercussion. It is known that human is one of the heaviest consumers of elastic which Is non-biodegradable materials that they are using to mass-produce beauty, baby and variety of household items. Plastics contain hazardous chemical when has direct contact with the food or skin can have an adverse reaction to your body that will create diseases in the long run. It causes a lot of pollution on earth that results in a natural disaster. Human consumes a lot of petrol to oil the machinery and luxurious cars that emit a portion of carbon dioxide in the air. If there are more Carbon Dioxide and less Oxygen in space we will have a hard time breathing that can lead to many diseases and up to death within humanity. Social media influencers promote them and gain a lot of followers, little did they know the bigger and negative impact it brings to their lives. Despite
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the great danger brought by producing elastic items and deadly chemical, the consumer who is impulsively purchasing will continue to destroy our planet in the near future. I reckon, the government should acknowledge all these major negative issues that can impact humanity. They should provide more support to a various community that drives various ideas about sustainable living. We as an individual should have the initiative to gain knowledge about alternative living like using bio-degradable material and natural energy to build and power the world. The manufacturing and retail company will continue to develop and promote a large number of items made out of elastic, heavy toxic chemical, petrol to function the economy. It is very obvious that they never really care about the health and safety of the general public but they are more after in the profit that they will gain within consumerism.
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