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I have learnt from boss’s ABC Bakery that I understand your bakery shop is looking for an experienced baker. I am interested in it. Therefore, I am writing to apply for the vacancy of baker in your company.

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I have learnt from
boss’s
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 ABC
Bakery
 that I understand your
bakery
 shop is looking for an experienced baker. I am interested in it.
Therefore
, I am writing to apply for the vacancy of a baker in your company. I graduated
from
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in
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 2008
in
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from
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 the
bakery
 faculty of Saigon Tourist Vocational College. After that, I worked as a baker for Duc Phat firm for four years before I opened my own
bakery
 in 2013. Up to now, I have approximately seven years-experience in making cakes
such
 as muffins, sandwich, bread and so forth. With my nature of diligence and extensive experience, I feel confident (Thầy
cho
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Cho
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 e hỏi confident là adj, fai đứng sau tobe,
sao
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Sao
so
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 này thầy lại dịch sau feel là verb ạ) that I would meet your company recruitment requirements and contribute significantly to your development plans as long as I was employed. I would like to enclosed in
this
 letter is my one resume, a medical card and certificates regarding
to
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my
bakery
 as well as my English. I am always ready to be discussed in more detail,
further
 information as grand me a job interview at your conveniences. I would appreciate it if you could take my letter into concern. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully,
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