I have learnt from boss’s ABC Bakery that I understand your bakery shop is looking for an experienced baker. I am interested in it. Therefore, I am writing to apply for the vacancy of baker in your company.

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ABC

Bakery

that I understand your

bakery

shop is looking for an experienced baker. I am interested in it.

Therefore

, I am writing to apply for the vacancy of a baker in your company. I graduated

from

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2008

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the

bakery

faculty of Saigon Tourist Vocational College. After that, I worked as a baker for Duc Phat firm for four years before I opened my own

bakery

in 2013. Up to now, I have approximately seven years-experience in making cakes

such

as muffins, sandwich, bread and so forth. With my nature of diligence and extensive experience, I feel confident (Thầy

cho

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Cho

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e hỏi confident là adj, fai đứng sau tobe,

sao

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này thầy lại dịch sau feel là verb ạ) that I would meet your company recruitment requirements and contribute significantly to your development plans as long as I was employed. I would like to enclosed in

this

letter is my one resume, a medical card and certificates regarding

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bakery

as well as my English. I am always ready to be discussed in more detail,

further

information as grand me a job interview at your conveniences. I would appreciate it if you could take my letter into concern. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully,

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I have learnt from boss’s ABC Bakery that I understand your bakery shop is looking for an experienced baker. I am interested in it. Therefore, I am writing to apply for the vacancy of baker in your company.

Fully explain your ideas

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The rise of social media platforms has made it easier for people to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. What is the consequence of this trend? Is there any benefit to expressing complaints on social media?

in some countries ,it is illegal for company to reject job applicants for their age. Is this a positive or negotive development ?

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.Why might this be the case?Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?