Human activities is damaging the Earth or making it a better place to live? Do you agree or disagree?

Earth
is the most beautiful sphere, with a suitable environment accomodating all kind of living organisms. With the rise of mortal, there are two schools of thought; whether human activities causing harm to the
Earth
or they contributed to improving it a better area to live? Personally, I with
agree
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the fact that individual
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caused greater damage to
this
earth
than transforming it for the better.
This
disquisition delves into both vantage points,
subsequently
, will explore our own perspective, in turn.
Firstly
, with robust ,activities individual are undeniably damaging
this
globe's pristine nature.
Accordingly
,
this
can be proved by analysing with occurring incidents of climate change, deforestation and resources exploitation.
As a result
, every year a rare
species
added to the lists of extinction,
also
all earthly resources are volatile and reducing at an alarming rate. To exemplify, a survey conducted by chronicle-journal in 2011, 70% of our globe's natural resources
such
as oil, steel, iron ore,etc are already consumed. Ergo,
this
exploitation is a result of human's greediness and overpopulation.
Thus
, because of people's enterprise and schemes,
Earth
along with all other
species
are suffering.
Secondly
, by analysing the context stating, humans transformed
this
planet to a better place to live, is absolutely right? Certainly not, with the help of the industrial revolution, the only man is getting all of its benefits.
Moreover
, any project people conduct is arguably destroying the landscape and nature of that place.
In addition
, human interventions lead to the relocation of all other
species
not only on land but
also
on the sea.
For instance
, in Brasil, as a standard practice, the joint venture of the government and local farmers, more than 100 hectare land of Amazon forest cleared through man-made disastrous fire; so that the land can be used for urbanization and agriculture.
Hence
, all the schemes by humans are only good to them, not for
this
globe and other
species
. To conclude, I reiterate that it is imperative to conduct development activities, in order to have a better life,
however
, we
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need
make sure that the project is harmless to other living things.
Therefore
, I consent to the hilt with exponents that human projects result in more damage than making them a desirable place.
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