Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is sometimes argued that it is
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’ obligation to teach their young to become a proper
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,while others claimed that
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has the
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to teach
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related to being a good
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.Truth be told,I think
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since both two ideas are beneficial.
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are the largest part of
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’s education because they are the people who stay around their
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most of the time.
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and value affect fundamentally in
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and values of
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even when they are not aware,so if
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did not do their job well to teach their
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to be
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proper person of the society,
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would able to help none no matter how hard they strive.
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,unlike educational institutions,to teach their
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this
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is more convenient and productive for
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to do so.
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,every mother and father have the
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educate their offspring
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,since it is the duty they must perform for being a
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of the society and it is the natural job for them to educate their
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for they are
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’ job of teaching their young to be a good member of the society
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more fundamental and important,it is
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educational institutions.The place where
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spend the
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most of their childhood
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school
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,so
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’s education has a major effect on
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.There are numbers of articles related
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the attitude of
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and the environment of
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impact
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’s mind.
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school
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must pay more price to educate
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to be
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of the country,since there are a
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students and they must pay a great deal of expense on
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should take most of the
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to cultivate their
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to become
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proper
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of the country,and schools have the
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major duty in doing
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since schools’ impacts on
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just cannot be ignored.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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