In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them.

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Nowadays, many people are steering toward an unhealthy lifestyle which leads to the result of obesity and

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decrease in fitness.

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essay will discuss the causes for

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problem and the means that could be taken to solve it. One reason for

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phenomenon is that the way of how people live has changed. Since the pace of life in today’s world grows ever faster, many workers are forced to buy fast food ;

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, the food

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sometimes made with stale ingredients which can gradually weaken the digestion system of our body and put us in an unnatural physiological circulation

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easy to gain fat but not able to lose it. As we know,

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obesity crisis is

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appearing in kids these days. Children in the past often go out to play with other kids after school and homework, but now they tend to stay at home for video games , television, and software

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as Tik Tok . As for adults, they rather spent more time with their phone than play with their kids or take a short walk , which increases the possibilities of growing fat and other negative impacts like the decrease

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eyesight .

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, there are three measures that could be used to prevent these things

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one is to manage a healthy diet containing more vegetables and fruit ,for that will be helpful to adjust our circulation of digestion. The

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way is to exercise more

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as hang out with friends or join outdoor activities with family.

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, schools and companies should organize something like

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too , because it will not only improve one’s fitness but

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increase one’s productivity. In sum, health is one’s greatest property ,without it we gain nothing. So everybody should take appropriate action on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

305 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary
obesity
overweight
physical activity
sedentary lifestyle
exercise
unhealthy diet
fast food
urbanization
modernization
stress
awareness
education
government intervention
policies
promotion
sports
fitness programs
health education
taxation
public transportation
infrastructure
parks
recreational spaces

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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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