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Band 6

Write a letter to a local authority by requesting additional sports facilities for your age group in your area. -Mention about the current sports facilities available -What kind of additional sports facilities should be introduced? -How would the new sports facilities be a help for the people in your age group?

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Dear sir, I am writing
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 letter to request you to provide a basketball net in the playground of City Hall Town, North Area, which can be an additional
sports
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sport
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 for young age who love to
persue
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pursue
peruse
thier
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their
 career in a
basket ball
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basketball
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 sport. As our place has cricket field and proper cover net where youngsters can practise free of cost.
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 these proper sitting arrangements, fresh water is
accessiable
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accessible
 for everyone. The senior
citizen
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citizens
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 easily use
West
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the West
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 side of the playground for
thier
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their
 yoga and
walk
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. I would like to request you to add a basketball net in the playground which can be free and beneficial for all who prefer to practise. As for now, the youth have no place to practise for it except the nearest Globo sports centre where we are asked to pay monthly membership which is pretty costly for us. With the help of these additional sports facilities, we would be able to do daily practice for upcoming tournaments in
city
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, which could be a great win for our area. Our team is doing hard work as our motive is to bring the trophy
for
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 our town. Looking forward to your prompt action. yours faithfully, Kim
richard
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Richard
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task achievement
Ensure the letter covers specific details about why the facilities are needed, such as mentioning any growing interest or number of participants.
coherence cohesion
Use transition words and phrases to ensure smooth flow between paragraphs and ideas.
task achievement
The letter effectively addresses the task by specifying both the existing facilities and the need for additional sports options.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a formal tone, which is suitable for addressing a local authority.
greeting and closing
Clear and concise closing paragraph that effectively sums up the request.
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