Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Refugees should be accepted by rich countries and give allowance to them for having food and a house. I completely disagree with
this
statement, I think not all of the
foreigner
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are
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not enough money to buy their daily need. There
are
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a lot of emigrant around the world. expatriate come from
different
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state or displaced person that come because of the accident or disaster in the rustic. The
country
which has a lot of money could give
evacuee
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who are their society a primary needs,
such
as Home and foods.
For example
, people who have lost their wealth because of the disaster.
This
population need a place for their living and
also
need foods for continuing their life. for
this
kind of situation, a rich
country
must help their society to get their primary need for continuing their life.
However
, refugees who come from other land are not allowed to get the
facilities
from a wealthy
country
. a rich
country
comes from natural resource or a tax from their nation who are rich. exile that
come
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from other
country
have
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not eligible to get help.
For example
,
Chinese
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community who take
a
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refuge from
Indonesia
do not eligible to get the primary need
facilities
from
Indonesia
. Chinese population not only do not belong to
Indonesia
,
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but
also
do not pay tax from
Indonesia
,
this
kind of situation will detrimental to the entire Indonesian society. To conclude,
although
a wealthy
country
can give a primary need to all emigrant either from their own
country
or
other land
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, the rich rustic should not give
facilities
to all kind of refugees. I hardly disagree if all foreigner will get
facilities
from a wealthy
country
.
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  • Refugees
  • Asylum seekers
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Economic impact
  • Public services
  • International law
  • Conventions relating to the status of refugees
  • Labor market
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Burden-sharing
  • Resettlement programs
  • Host country
  • Border security
  • Comprehensive policy
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