Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Refugees should be accepted by rich countries and give allowance to them for having food and a house. I completely disagree with
this
statement, I think not all of the Linking Words
foreigner
Change to a plural noun
foreigners
are
not enough money to buy their daily need.
There Change the verb form
is
are
a lot of emigrant around the world. expatriate come from Change the verb form
is
different
state or displaced person that come because of the accident or disaster in the rustic. The Add an article
a different
country
which has a lot of money could give Use synonyms
evacuee
who are their society a primary needs, Change the noun form
evacuees
such
as Home and foods. Linking Words
For example
, people who have lost their wealth because of the disaster. Linking Words
This
population need a place for their living and Linking Words
also
need foods for continuing their life. for Linking Words
this
kind of situation, a rich Linking Words
country
must help their society to get their primary need for continuing their life.
Use synonyms
However
, refugees who come from other land are not allowed to get the Linking Words
facilities
from a wealthy Use synonyms
country
. a rich Use synonyms
country
comes from natural resource or a tax from their nation who are rich. exile that Use synonyms
come
from other Change the verb form
comes
country
Use synonyms
have
not eligible to get help. Change the verb form
has
For example
, Linking Words
Chinese
community who take Correct article usage
the Chinese
a
refuge from Remove the article
apply
Indonesia
do not eligible to get the primary need Use synonyms
facilities
from Use synonyms
Indonesia
. Chinese population not only do not belong to Use synonyms
Indonesia
Use synonyms
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
do not pay tax from Linking Words
Indonesia
, Use synonyms
this
kind of situation will detrimental to the entire Indonesian society.
To conclude, Linking Words
although
a wealthy Linking Words
country
can give a primary need to all emigrant either from their own Use synonyms
country
or Use synonyms
other land
, the rich rustic should not give Change the wording
another land
other lands
facilities
to all kind of refugees. I hardly disagree if all foreigner will get Use synonyms
facilities
from a wealthy Use synonyms
country
.Use synonyms
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite