Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Refugees should be accepted by rich countries and give allowance to them for having food and a house. I completely disagree with
this
statement, I think not all of the foreigner
Change to a plural noun
foreigners
are
not enough money to buy their daily need.
There Change the verb form
is
are
a lot of emigrant around the world. expatriate come from Change the verb form
is
different
state or displaced person that come because of the accident or disaster in the rustic. The Add an article
a different
country
which has a lot of money could give evacuee
who are their society a primary needs, Change the noun form
evacuees
such
as Home and foods. For example
, people who have lost their wealth because of the disaster. This
population need a place for their living and also
need foods for continuing their life. for this
kind of situation, a rich country
must help their society to get their primary need for continuing their life.
However
, refugees who come from other land are not allowed to get the facilities
from a wealthy country
. a rich country
comes from natural resource or a tax from their nation who are rich. exile that come
from other Change the verb form
comes
country
have
not eligible to get help. Change the verb form
has
For example
, Chinese
community who take Correct article usage
the Chinese
a
refuge from Remove the article
apply
Indonesia
do not eligible to get the primary need facilities
from Indonesia
. Chinese population not only do not belong to Indonesia
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
do not pay tax from Indonesia
, this
kind of situation will detrimental to the entire Indonesian society.
To conclude, although
a wealthy country
can give a primary need to all emigrant either from their own country
or other land
, the rich rustic should not give Change the wording
another land
other lands
facilities
to all kind of refugees. I hardly disagree if all foreigner will get facilities
from a wealthy country
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