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The only way to improve safety on our roads is to give much stricter punishments for driving offences. What extend do you agree or disagree?

#safety #roads #punishments #offences
Establishing rigorous punishments for driving violations is the only way to improve safety on our roads. I totally agree with the statement. I believe
this
approach
 will lead to fewer offences on the roads. Viewed from the driver’s side,
this
approach
 will raise fear and caution because common people do not want to get any punishment.
First
, stricter punishments are easily applied on the road.
This
approach
 is more corrective action rather than preventive action. Using
this
approach
, the government only focuses on establishing the rule
then
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 citizens. Practically, it will be helped by police or cameras to monitor the offences.
This
 way is easier than increasing the driver's awareness of safety, it will conduct many socialization and workshop events for civilians to raise their awareness of safety.
Second
,
Evenless
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 if the punishment is related to a fine, the higher fine will be
more scary
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 for most people.
This
approach
 will be very effective for common people. Especially in emerging countries with lower economic citizens.
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 they would be more careful to spend their money. The civilian will prioritize their money for primary needs
instead
 of paying the fine.
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