It is important for children to know the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? What kind of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach children good behavior?

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will discuss both views and I will draw my personal opinion. On one hand,there are a lot of advantages of
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will take you to the supermarket.To illustrate,I have a brother 8 years old,at the exams period
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told him if you take high mark
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phenomenon and it's
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strategy of teaching.
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am 11 years my
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father hit him
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because he was bad
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school,now he has
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furthermore
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up 70% he will go back to the wrong side.at
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time you can not catch him and teach him again. In conclusion,after careful analysis of benefits and
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with the
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benefical
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last
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with your
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the future.
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