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Most information about culture and history can be found on the Internet, so museums are not needed anymore. Do you agree or disagree?

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The globe net saves the huge flow of different data, providing the access to variational information in all fields of our lives, in
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, cultural heritage and historical events are
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 available for learning on the Internet. In
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 cause, there exists the opinion that visiting museums have outlived their usefulness.
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, I cannot agree with
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 idea. Fistful,
people
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 can observe items and
artifacts
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 in real life by visiting museums in
physical
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 manner. It expressed in a different and realistic experience.
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, if
people
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 go to the museum, they can find out how was the life of
people
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 who lived in the different period. They can imagine that they are in that same time and place, and they get impressions from
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 kind of event.
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, seeing modern exhibitions can unite
people
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 because
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 event could be spent in a group with
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,
in
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school
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a school
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 tour or
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a
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family
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the family
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 weekend.
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,
this
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 event could be a type of team building for white
weeters
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writers
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, to take a break from routine work and to talk with colleagues in the
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 atmosphere.
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, school tours could
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 a sense of beauty and attract students, if even they just prefer
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 the social nets. To conclude, the Internet resources of culture and history have
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fast and convenient access, no tickets and
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huge data, but all these benefits would not replace the sense of reality and cohesion. A nation’s historical and cultural treasures abound in museums and there must be maintained.

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