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International travel has many advantages to both travelers and the country visited. DO you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#travel #travelers #country
Nowadays, tourism becomes one of
a
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 most important part of the
country
. As many people travel from one place to another in a year to explore another culture, religion, values, background and ethnicity. From my point of view, the merits of travelling to different places than demerits. The
first
 and foremost point which I want to highlight is with the bits of help of tourism it will
development
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 the government economy which will help the provincial and raise the funds so that
country
 can invest money in different sectors like, education, medical and shelter for the society who are in need for basic necessities.
Moreover
, when people come to another place they come to know about the countries tradition, values, background and belief which helps to
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 the knowledge of the individual.
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 but not
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least advantage of travelling which I want to highlight is that when individuals visit the
country
 it will increase the industrialisation of the
country
 which will improve the problem of unemployment. To exemplify, when every year
population
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 visit the
country
 they need to make malls, hotels, food restaurants and other facilities so
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the making of different locations increase
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employment opportunities.
On the other hand
, the negative side of the international holiday is that when
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 from another
country
 visit will raise the noise and air pollution which cause many health problems.
Moreover
, it automatically caused traffic on the roads due to an increase in the number of vehicles. Travelling cause communication disease like, coronavirus which caused due to the travelling of the individuals from one place to another. In the nutshell, as every situation has two sides in
this
 way I think the advantages of travelling to the
country
 is more as it provides a lot of benefits to the government and the citizens of the society as
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 to the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchange
  • Exposure
  • Broadens horizons
  • Increases understanding
  • Promotes economic growth
  • Tourism
  • Educational opportunities
  • Personal development
  • Self-confidence
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon footprint
  • Disease transmission
  • Economic disparities
  • Cultural misunderstandings
  • Clashes
  • Security risks
  • Safety concerns
  • Balancing
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
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