At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the numbers of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, In many countries have a population of young
people
. Some believe that it is a positive impact on a nation having a huge youth population others believe it opposes.
This
essay will discuss both the positive and negative effects of having a young generation in the forthcoming paragraphs
To begin
with, there is a list of advantages to having a majority of the youth in the
country
.
Firstly
, A huge number of labour available in the
country
. Young
people
can do heavy and speedy work as compared to senior citizens. It is
also
said that youth is the future of a nation. So, if a
country
has a large number of young
people
then
the future of that
country
will
also
bright.
For instance
, In a survey found that Denmark is
a
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the

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best
country
all
over
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in

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the world because there all leaders are
of
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apply

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young age. They better think future of
country
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the country

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. Young
people
are healthier and spend less on their health and focus
to
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on

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the development of the
country
.
Moreover

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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