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There are many people who believe that food produced by the country should be for the people of the country and that it should not be imported. What are your views?

Should
food
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 products be imported or used for
people
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 locally?
This
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 is often debatable as many
people
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 argue homegrown
food
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 should be used for the local
people
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 rather than transporting to other
countries
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 .
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, I am of the opinion that importing
food
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 will boost the
countries
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economy
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 and will be beneficial in strengthening bonds between the
nations
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.
Firstly
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, importing products will expand the business in other
nations
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 apart from bringing name and fame to the
country
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. Other
nations
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 will be familiar with the items grown in local
countries
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.
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, Kiwi is available in every market places in India and almost all
people
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 know that it comes from New Zealand.
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, by Importing
food
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 items ,
countries
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 can share good relationships with each other and expand their businesses.
Secondly
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, by transporting homegrown
food
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 produce , the
economy
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 will boost. Since
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 there will be growth in GDP of Importing
country
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.
Hence
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, there will be overall development of a nation as the government can utilize the profit in helping the poor
people
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 by providing basic amenities of life like improving standards of living, good education and strengthening health care.
For Instance
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, In a Developing
country
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 like India, agriculture is the main source of income for a nation and by Importing local produce, the
economy
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 will be strengthened.
Thus
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, the trade will be beneficial for both
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nation's
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nations
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. In conclusion, I believe importing
food
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 items can be beneficial for the overall growth of the
country
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 as there will be a boost in the
economy
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 .
Thus
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 it will be mutually beneficial for both
nations
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 as trade business can be expanded.

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