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There are many people who believe that food produced by the country should be for the people of the country and that it should not be imported. What are your views?

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Should
food
 products be imported or used for
people
 locally?
This
 is often debatable as many
people
 argue homegrown
food
 should be used for the local
people
 rather than transporting to other
countries
 .
However
, I am of the opinion that importing
food
 will boost the
countries
economy
 and will be beneficial in strengthening bonds between the
nations
.
Firstly
, importing products will expand the business in other
nations
 apart from bringing name and fame to the
country
. Other
nations
 will be familiar with the items grown in local
countries
.
For example
, Kiwi is available in every market places in India and almost all
people
 know that it comes from New Zealand.
Therefore
, by Importing
food
 items ,
countries
 can share good relationships with each other and expand their businesses.
Secondly
, by transporting homegrown
food
 produce , the
economy
 will boost. Since
,
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 there will be growth in GDP of Importing
country
.
Hence
, there will be overall development of a nation as the government can utilize the profit in helping the poor
people
 by providing basic amenities of life like improving standards of living, good education and strengthening health care.
For Instance
, In a Developing
country
 like India, agriculture is the main source of income for a nation and by Importing local produce, the
economy
 will be strengthened.
Thus
, the trade will be beneficial for both
the
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nation's
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. In conclusion, I believe importing
food
 items can be beneficial for the overall growth of the
country
 as there will be a boost in the
economy
 .
Thus
 it will be mutually beneficial for both
nations
 as trade business can be expanded.
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