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The diagram outlines the
process
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 of
electricity
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 production in a hydroelectric
power
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station
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. The
process
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 begins when the
water
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flows
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 from the
river
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 into a high-level
reservoir
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 and ends with the transmission of
electricity
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 to the national grid. In general, the
process
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 is broadly distributed into
day
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 and
night
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 stages with the daylight stages involving
electricity
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 production from a
river
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 and storage of
water
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 in a
reservoir
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. At
night
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, the
water
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flows
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 back in the opposite direction towards an initial
reservoir
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 and the
river
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. The
day
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 stage of the
process
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 involves channelling the
river
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water
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 into a high-level
reservoir
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 backed up by a dam. There is an intake area leading to the
power
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station
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 that opens during the
day
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 and closes at
night
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.
Water
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flows
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 during the
day
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 to generate
electricity
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 through the
power
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station
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 turbines. The generated
electricity
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 is
then
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 sent to a national grid through
power
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 lines while the excess
water
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 runs to a low-level
reservoir
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. During the
night
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 stage, the
water
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 stored in the low-level
reservoir
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 is reverted to the
power
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station
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 and the turbines of the generator pump it back into the high-level
reservoir
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 which is closed during the
night
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. The
river
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water
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 is stored at the upper level and later it
flows
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 down, starting the cycle again.
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