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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #railways #roads
Some individuals are of the opinion that authorities should increase
railways
 rather than
roads
. While I agree that
railways
 may benefit the residents of
countryside
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the countryside
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 and make
contribution
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 to a healthier environment rather than
roads
, I believe that as far as quiet atmosphere and
time
 is concerned growth in
roads
 seems more satisfying. On the one hand, raising the number of
railways
 can be considered as a positive trend.
First
, when it comes to rural people, regarding the size of rails which do not
required
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 large space, building
railways
 in mountainous
areas
 which are generally located in
countryside
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the countryside
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 is easier than
roads
.
As a result
, the inhabitants of these places have easy access to
cities
 and they can transport more conveniently.
Secondly
, from
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environmentally
environmently
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 friendly perspective, building
railways
 has resounding effects on decreasing
the
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air pollution,
generally
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trains
 are able to transport a large number of people in comparison with cars.
This
 may decrease the cars’ usage.
As a result
, governments by investigating in
railways
 can decrease
the cars emissions
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the car's emissions
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 which lead to dropping the weather contaminants.
On the other hand
, when it comes to the
the
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inhabitants of big
cities
, their preference is building of more
roads
.
Although
 the construction of
railways
 may enable the residents of urban
areas
 to transport to other
cities
 and places better, regarding
time
, many residents of megacities regret using
trains
 because they find it very tiring and
time consuming
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.
Generally
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 the movement of
trains
 is very slow which has a speed limitation. So
travelers
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 may spend
long
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time
to get
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 to their destination.
For instance
, by driving your personal car, it takes about 5 hours to get to Tehran from Esfahan whereas when it comes to
trains
 it may take about 10 hours.
Moreover
,
generally
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trains
 are very crowded and noisy. The citizens of crowded
areas
 who are generally seeking
for
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silent
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 and peace may not find
trains
 a relaxing place.
Therefore
, they are less enthusiastic about using
trains
. All in all, increasing
railways
 may benefit rural
areas
.
However
, building more
roads
 in the
center
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 of
cities
 probably is more practical.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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