Many criminals re-offend after they have been punished. Why do some people continue to commit crimes after they have been punished, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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Crime
is
pevasive
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pervasive
in nature and many countries failed to
control
the rate of
recidivisum
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recidivism
. There are many factors, which are the root cause of increasing
crime
by re-offenders. Indeed, some strong action should be taken by
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government
goverment
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as well as society to
control
the rate of
crime
. In
this
essay, I will discuss the reason
of
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increasing
crime
by
offender
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an offender
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after long
prinsion
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prison
pension
and how to
control
this
by adapting some
messure
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measure
. There are two main reasons, which
inforce
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enforce
criminal to re-commit the
crime
.
Firstly
, If a
prisionor
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prisoner
comes from criminal background or has a friend involved in drugs or burglaries. It's
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hight
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high
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chance to re-commit the
crime
.
Secondly
, another major factor is
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poverty
and
unemployement
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unemployment
. After taking incarceration society is not able to
acept
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accept
the criminal as a normal person and not give any employment to them.
As a result
, they face poverty and unable to
servive
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service
survive
.
This
kind of situations
force
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them to be re-offender. To
control
the rate of recidivism its require to take proper actions by
government
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the government
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along. In
prison
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the prison
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rehablitation
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rehabilitation
proccess
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process
for addiction of drugs,alcohol should
be include
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in order to
control
devasting effects after
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the exit
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exit
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of criminal. and
this
should include from the very
first
day of
offender
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the offender
an offender
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.
In addition
to
this
life
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skils
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skills
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should
be teach
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, that will help them to prepare
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themself
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them self
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themself
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for employment after imprisonment.
for example
, in Norway
prisonor
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prisoner
learn all skills required for
job
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a job
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during their time in
prision
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prison
. In conclusion, to
control
the re-offender ts
vvery
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very
important to give proper education to criminals so that they
servive
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survive
service
after
imprision
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imprison
and at the same time
socity
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society
also
need to
acept
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accept
them and treat them as a human not criminal.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recidivism
  • rehabilitation
  • reintegration
  • social stigma
  • vocational training
  • economic desperation
  • mental health support
  • institutionalization
  • peer influence
  • mentorship programs
  • crime cycle
  • societal inclusion
  • job readiness programs
  • re-offending
  • ex-offenders
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