Some people say that health care and education should be the responsibility of the government while others think that it is the responsibility of the individuals themselves. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
this
era, health and education both play
the
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vital role in the everyones' life, where it is
also
not easy to handle due to
the
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inflation, majority of people usually expect that
this
problem should be solved by the
government
, while
other
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others
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believe that it can be done by the
induviduals
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individuals
themselves. As the rate of population rockets every year, the demand for the academics and hospitals
also
surge,
for instance
, each
parents
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parent
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want their children to get educated and acquire
the
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university degree, so that they could able to get
job
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in the renowned enterprise,
additionally
, after the arrival of the Covid-19, now each person gets
concern
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concerned
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about their health, where enormous pressure can be seen in the medical sectors.
Consequently
, the more there are stipulations from the citizens, the
more
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higher pressure will be on the
government
, where they are inducing the responsibility on them because when the former fails to handle the situation, in the case of income,
familly
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family
matter, or the corrupted system,
then
all weapons are laid to the latter
,
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because they believe that it is only the
government
, who can handle as they believe that they have given the vote, now the latter will be the one, who will handle their situations. If they failed to do so,
then
they
threat
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them
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to demolish their power in the
next
elections. While, in reality, it is an
induvidual
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individual
duty to handle the situation because the
government
can only
helps
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help
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in constructing and funding the educational institutions and hospitals,
moreover
, they can provide some support by providing medical supports, like
during
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pandemic, the
government
have aided in providing the sanitizations kits, increase the vaccination productions and provide it free to the public, but they cannot help in spending money on admissions or pay whole fees on the hospital bills. In that case, if everyone
expect
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that the
government
help,
then
it is
also
neccessary
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necessary
to begin
from us by paying the income tax monthly, we all feel it
unneccessary
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unnecessary
, but in
reality
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it works the best, if we will do so,
then
the
government
will
also
able to increase in developing the more edifice and great quality.
Then
,
secondly
, we must
also
maintain and keep clean,
then
try to improve the quality of hospitals by keeping sanitize regularly, refurbish it if
neccessary
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necessary
. In Conclusion, every each
induvidual
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individual
have to stand
itself
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for itself
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as we cannot fully rely on the
government
.
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