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Some people claim that not enough of wastes from homes is recycled. They say that that only way to increase recycling for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

#people #wastes #homes #governments #requirement #laws #waste
The world nowadays is inclining towards
greenary
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greenery
.Some citizens argued that there
is
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 no effective ways for recycling the wastes from houses. So according to
them
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 officials should take more legal actions against
this
 issue.I strongly believe that
government
 can improve
recycling
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the recycling
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 of
waste
 from our surroundings through effective
laws
.
Government
authorities
 should implement
penalty
laws
 for those who violate the regulation imposed by them because only through heavy
penalty
 the civilians will be aware
about
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 the law
otherwise
 they would be imposed by
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 amount.
Authorities
 should provide proper
awarness
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awareness
 about the recycling process of different materials and
its
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their
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 various methods through campaigns. For instances
accordingly
 to a
suvery
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survey
 conducted by Mumbai
waste
 recycling management
authorities
, 75% of household
waste
 are efficiently
disposed
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 through different channels allocated by
authorities
 ,so it
isclearly
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is clearly
 evident that through effective
laws
 with
penalty
 will help to improve the quality of recycling .
Secondly
,the
government
 officials and
civilans
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civilians
 should be aware
about
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of
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 the adverse effects due to lack of proper recycling of
waste
 because these materials cause damage to our environment for both
human
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 as well as marine life
also
.
Mostly
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non
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non-degaradable
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degaradable
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degradable
waste
 act as a threat if it not properly managed because
accumulation
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the accumulation
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 of
these
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waste
 will affect
sewage
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the sewage
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 system ,rivers and lakes and thereby marine life
also
.
For example
, 85% of rivers and lakes are polluted especially in cities due to biodegradable
waste
 like cans and plastic bottles which result in
life threatening
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life-threatening
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 issues like water contamination which affect both humans and
also
 animals like fishes and plants. In conclusion, both
government
 and civilians should work together for a better atmosphere and green environment .Imposing more
penalty
laws
 and regulation will create an
awarness
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awareness
 among citizen which help to save our motherland.
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