Some people think one should stay all their life in the same job, whereas others advocate changing jobs from time to time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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is a significant stimulator to improve prosperity and well-being.
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of people believe that a
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should remain in the same
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in their career .
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, some chunks of folks
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that a
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change is essential from one period to another. The forthcoming essay will discuss both aspects prior to my
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, doing the same
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for a long period of time makes a man perfect in that task which
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to enrich his skills and knowledge in that subject. And the
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who is employed in that
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will get
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satisfaction in his work
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because he is mastered in his works which
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their organisation task more efficiently and effectively within the time limit.
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, if a
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is doing the same
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for years in the same company he can create a good relationship and
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trust with other employees
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thereby create a harmonious environment in that organisation.
For example
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, My cousin is working in a private company
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36years , started her career as
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executive , later she was promoted
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financial officer in that department.
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she started in
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, through her connections and with trust among them she was promoted to
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title.
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, negative impacts
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exist and the major pitfall associated with
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over a long period of time is that employees became monotonous. Every
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changes throughout their life especially in the case of
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.Most of them believe that
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change will help to increase opportunities and skills because they get
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other environment
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another environment
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. Experiences from different background will make an individual perfect and they can be able to survive in any condition.
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they can switch from one
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title to another without much
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. For instances, a candidate with more experience in various sectors from different companies
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more
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opportunities because they have
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to adapt to
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environment which is an essential strength for an employee.
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, having discussed the topic at length,
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agree to some
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that a
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should stick
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for life long is not a good idea.
On the contrary
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, they have to get exposed to
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another job
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in order to
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increase their skills and competency.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job security
  • stability
  • financial insecurity
  • expertise
  • advance their careers
  • promotions
  • pay raises
  • recognition
  • personal and professional growth
  • work environments
  • responsibilities
  • skill set
  • adaptability
  • job satisfaction
  • mental health
  • stuck
  • stagnant
  • lucrative
  • job offers
  • commitment
  • instability
  • retirement plans
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