Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extend do you agree or disagree

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that have been in prison.
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, I think that these ex-convicts that have turned into good
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will try to do their best in teaching the students why they have to avoid illegal situations.
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, these
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that want to show the dangers of breaking the law will know better what are the risks because they had experienced
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I mean that they can tell what are the reasons that usually push someone to do these crimes. Apart from their personal stories they probably have met more
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that were in similar situations but had a different ending
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can be very good to show the teenagers that breaking the law may end in the worst possible way.
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, for the students is good to see that when their parents or teachers advise them to avoid
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dangerous life is for a good reason and they can see what can happen to them.
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are not trained to teach so maybe they don't know how to tell what are the dangers. So I am of the opinion that bringing
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that have committed crimes to talk what are the risks of not follow the law is the best way to convince them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prisoners
  • rehabilitation
  • recidivism
  • consequences
  • insights
  • deterrent
  • guidance
  • support
  • role models
  • positive change
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