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Band 6

You brought some dog food from a store, and it turned out to be the expired one. Write a letter to the store manager about this.

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Dear Manager, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my frustration as I have received an expired product from your stock.
Last
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 week, I
had
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purchased "Drools" dog food for my dog, and seems like it
was
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 expired. The food bag has crossed the date of expiration and I did not realise until after I bought it and had a look at it today. I usually check expiration dates, but as your
store
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 was a well-known stock, I trusted you and didn’t check
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 time.
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, your
store
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 has broken my trust. As a consumer, I have the right to go to the consumer court and file a complaint against your
store
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, which may lead to the entire
store
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 inspection or warnings. My receipt has been attached to
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 email. I am expecting compensation for the inconvenience that I have suffered and a written promise that
such
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 things
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 never happen again. Yours Faithfully, Annie
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task response
Ensure that the letter clearly addresses the issue of receiving an expired product and the requested resolution. Include specific details regarding the purchase and expiration date.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear introduction, body, and conclusion with appropriate transitions for better coherence and cohesion. Use formal language for greeting and closing.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and expressions to communicate the issue more effectively. Try to avoid repetition of words and phrases.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and the use of prepositions to improve grammatical range.
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