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Globalization has both advantages and disadvantages. Discuss both and give your opinion.

#globalization
Over recent years globalization has become an integral part of our lives. Though it proliferates the development of a nation ,
however
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 due to the increasing influx of global cultures, traditional values may fall on the verge of extinction and
as a
result
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 one nation may lose its traditional activity with respect to arts, cultures, clothing and so on. In
this
 essay, I will illustrate the positive and negative aspects of globalism and put my viewpoint at the end. Generally speaking ,globalization has been contributing in
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 positive way towards the progress of a country. Perhaps the main contributing factor to
this
 trend is the development of the local economy.
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, any investor around the globe can search for a suitable factory or facility to fabricate products that will be cost-effective for the end-users. Due to
this
 mobilization ,not only the investors become benefitted but
also
 the local community,who can live a better life.
Secondly
 ,due to internationalization lots of employees can move to other places with respect to their capacity and desire,
hence
 every nation can fulfil their vacancy with global talent.
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, India earned almost 40% of its foreign remittance through engaging various experts globally. Despite acute positive aspects ,
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 there are few negative issues
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 need to consider as well.
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, every society has its own traditions for its food, attire, cultures and so on. Due to rampant access to global traditions,
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 generation
are
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 losing interest in traditional events.
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, folks are very comfortable
to wear
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 modern attire
instead
 of original clothing ,
as a result
 ,foreseeable future, these dresses will be placed in museums. In conclusion,after having discussed the relevant points of
this
 topic, I am inclined to the opinion that globalization will be always advantageous for the people if the local authority can take care of certain negative aspects of it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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