Some people think that we can not learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays the discussion regarding whether historical heritages are useful in terms of one country's development has sparked off an intense debate. In my honest opinion,
history
has a large potential contribution to the country,
however
, whether the entire past is useful is always subjective and open to be debated. On the one hand , it is undebatable that the prosperity for most of the nations partially came from its historical spirits.
This
is because
history
itself, by definition, is the failure and the trial of the entire humanity,
therefore
since lots of mistakes that were made by our ancestor was recorded along with the devastating consequences of various kinds of failures.
Then
the
history
may act as a kind of guide for future development that enables the nation to avoid the same kinds of mistakes that the ancient people has already taken.
On the other hand
, it is
also
arguable that certain people regard
history
as literately nothing but a good source of story-making.
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significance when applies to practical uses like economic and social development. These people always defence themself by providing some irrelevant information like the fact that the USA is built on the ground where it is only inhabited or civilized for only 200 plus years. The fatal defect for
such
argument
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is the fact that it may
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or lists certain fancy facts and data.
However
, they just suggested that
history
is not a necessity for a country's prosperity. To sum up the above-mentioned statements, it is crucially important to
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fully
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awareness about the contribution of
history
even though it may not be useful for all kinds of circumstances.
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