In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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contemporary era, It is irrefutable that small nations parents are encouraging young
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and suggest them to
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in their study field to gain some experience and few of them are forcing
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due to the family conditions while others are giving them
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advice to take a break and go for a
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with their friends to learn the outside culture and know the things around you. I strongly towards the former notion. In
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generation towards the working culture and to understand the world.
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, Few
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need
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financial
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from their
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them to do some
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. If they are going for a
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after completing high school
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of doing
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then
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how their
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survive.
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, In small
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having dependence on elder son like after finishing his education he can
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their parent financially.
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, Doing
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teenagers learn and understand the problems very well
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a small age.
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after finishing
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high school their
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's will go for a world
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rather finding a job. Why because they don't have any money problem and
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of the
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their own businesses. They know after them their child will handle their family businesses.
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,
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do not want to do any kind of
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job.
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, In small nations as well having rich human beings and they don't want
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their young generation to
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or struggle for
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work
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. That's why they send them for a
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to know after the different culture and learn something new. In Conclusion, It
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on the situation of the
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status. Few of them are encourage their young generation for
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work
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to
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family,
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contrast
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other
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send them for a
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to understand and learn the different tradition. In my opinion, Everything depends on your family status and requirement whether you need to do a job or travel and enjoy our life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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