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Some people think adults should learn practical skills by themselves, while others think they should learn with teachers in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #adults #skills #teachers #classroom
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excellence
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 up should expertise
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in skills
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 of their own, while
other
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others
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 believe it should be
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supervised learning. In
this
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 we will discuss both
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views, with my opinion in the conclusion. Learning by
self
 has been a source
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to
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for
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 some people.
Firstly
,
this
 helps us to understand the complexities of a subject to a greater depth. It makes us wiser to appreciate its merits and demerits .
Secondly
,
voluntering
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volunteering
 to learn by
self
 makes us more focused and engrossed.
This
 in turn
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 your confidence and raises
self esteem
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. We start polishing more our skills and keep on improvising
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. For instances, it has been seen
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children
childrens
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children
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 who do
self study
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self-study
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 at school level
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performed
perform
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 at universities.
Finally
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the
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attempt
of
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self learning
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self-learning
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 increases our overall
knoweledge
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knowledge
 and thereby changing us
to
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 a
well educated
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 person.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, becoming a learned person from educators has always
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 impact.
To begin
 with, attaining knowledge from
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a well
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well experienced
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 person will undeniably give us
right
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 direction.
This
 will
consequently
, help us to achieve our best in a short stipulated time.
In addition
, learning in
classroom
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the classroom
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 always gives us
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a competitive
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envoirnment
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environment
. we always try to chase each other and work hard to be on top of
list
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the list
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.
For instance
, people studying in class seems to be more
competative
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competitive
 than
the
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those learning through distance education. At
last
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us
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platform
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 for debates and discussion.
This
 will aid us in clarifying your doubts
hence
,
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assisting
 us to achieve our goal with clarity and confidence. To conclude,
eventhough
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even though
,
self learning
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self-learning
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 is of some importance but in my
opinion
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i
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I
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 strongly believe that learning is incomplete without teachers. Teachers are always considered builders of
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 and
there
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 contribution is rewarding.Teachers
makes
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make
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 learning effortless and
intersting
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interesting
.
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