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Some people think adults should learn practical skills by themselves, while others think they should learn with teachers in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Enhancing our abilities to
excellance
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excellence
 has always been desired. Some argue that
grown up
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grown-ups
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 should
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have expertise
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skills
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in skills
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 of their own,
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other
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others
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 believe it should be
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supervised learning. In
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essay
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 we will discuss both
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views, with my opinion in the conclusion. Learning by
self
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 has been a source
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to
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 some people.
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,
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 helps us to understand the complexities of a subject to a greater depth. It makes us wiser to appreciate its merits and demerits .
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,
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volunteering
 to learn by
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self
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oneself
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makes us more focused and engrossed.
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 in turn
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 your confidence and raises
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self esteem
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. We start polishing
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our skills and keep on improvising
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them
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. For
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, it has been seen
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children
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 who do
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self study
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self-study
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 at
school
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the school
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 level
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perform
 brillant at universities.
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,
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the
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attempt of
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self learning
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self-learning
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 increases our
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knoweledge
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knowledge
 and thereby changing us to a
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person
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people
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.
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Nevertheless
, becoming a learned person from educators has always positive impact.
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 with, attaining knowledge from well
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 person will undeniably give us
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 direction.
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, help us to achieve our best in a short stipulated time.
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, learning in
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the classroom
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 always gives us
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a competitive
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envoirnment
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environment
. we always try to chase each other and work hard to be on top of
list
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the list
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.
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, people studying in class
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seem
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 to be more
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competitive
 than
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those learning through distance education. At
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, supervised learning will provide us
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 for debates and discussion.
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 will aid us in clarifying your doubts
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,
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assisting
 us to achieve our goal with clarity and confidence.
To conclude
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,
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even though
,
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self learning
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self-learning
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 is of some importance
but
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in my
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opinion,
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 strongly believe that learning is incomplete without teachers. Teachers are always considered builders of
nation
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the nation
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 and
there
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their
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 contribution is rewarding.Teachers
makes
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 learning effortless and
intersting
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interesting
.

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Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that supporting sentences are relevant and well-developed.
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Pay attention to grammatical accuracy, including spelling and punctuation errors, as these can distract from your message.
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Incorporate a wider range of vocabulary and more complex sentence structures to enhance your writing style.
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You present a clear argument for both sides of the issue, which is essential for discussion essays.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your viewpoint, providing a clear stance on the topic.
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