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Some people believe that traveling alone is the best way to experience a country or a culture. Others feel that it is better to travel with people you know. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are different points of view regarding travelling. While some claim that exploring a new place alone is more preferable others prefer to travel with friends and family. In my
opinion
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 discovering a new country or culture together is always better.
Firstly
, it is much safer to travel with the
people
 you know. Some places,
for
example
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 some African or Latin-American countries, though incredibly interesting, might
also
 be dangerous. It is especially true for women and girls and it would be unsafe for them to return to their hotels alone in the evening. The same goes for wild nature, which can be quite treacherous.
Secondly
, shared experience makes our own impressions brighter. There is something special and extremely enjoyable in seeing your friend or family member admire
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 architecture or enjoy local food.
Moreover
,
such
 collective trips can create a special bond between
people
 and leave them with common memories.
Nevertheless
, there are some undeniable benefits of
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 alone. Among them is the ability to manage your time the way you want. For some
people
 spending few hours in a picture gallery is an absolute must, while for others half an hour would be enough. Another thing to consider is the way we perceive a different culture. It is much easier to immerse yourself in a different culture if you are not surrounded by
people
 from your place of living.
For example
, learning a new language comes effortlessly when you do not have an option to speak your native one. To conclude, while solo trips have their own advantages, I prefer to share precious moments of discovery with the
people
 I know.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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