In many developing countries, there is an increasing movement of workers from rural areas into the cities. why do you think this happens? What problems can this cause?

Some people think that good
health
is very important to every
person
, so medical service should not be run by profit-making companies .Do the advantages of private
health
care
outweight
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the disadvantages. It would be justifiable to state that irrespective of economical status,
a
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sound
health
is every
person
's basic right. Considering
this
, it is suggested that
handling
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of
health
services should be taken out of the hands of
private
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corporation. Agreed,
non government
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health
care
has got some merits to offer yet ample unfavourable aspects thrive in its lap. The upcoming paragraphs will analyse both praiseworthy aspects and shortcomings in a more specified way. Private medical services
has
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proven to be a blessing in few cases. The most plausible one is
availability
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the availability

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of experienced doctors,
state-of-the- art
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medical facilities and
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equipment that are found very easily in private hospitals. Considering
this
, it is logical to assume that a
person
has better scope of recovery when diagnosed and treated over here.
Further
, keeping in mind the fact that
doctors
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and nurses ratio to patients is quite low in privately owned
health
centers
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, it would be safe to remark that mandatory attention and
care
is dispensed to each patient which,in turn, proves beneficial for the same.
Nevertheless
,
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side of the picture is rather grim. Indeed,when a
person
in
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suffering is admitted to
private
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health
centre rather than
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government
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owned one, chances of getting exorbitant bills of treatment are run high. Worth noting is the fact that
instead
of providing medical
care
, private clinics are more in minting money by doing fake and unnecessary surgeries, prescribing expensive medicines or even by treating a dead
person
over and over again. Everyday cases of private hospital deceit
recieved
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by
indian
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medical association in India speak volumes of how low these hospitals have steeped for the sake of money. Another factor that goes against
such
services is that these unaffordable for most of the public and it usually indebted whenever they have to get
healing
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done from here. At
last
,it can be summed up that no doubt private
health
hospitals have some merits to offer yet the demerits of it,which far outstrips the former,are surely not to be missed and
therefore
,
health
case must not
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to private companies in
larger
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public interest.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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