Some people think that secondary or high secondary students should be taught how to use money management as it important life skills. Do you agree or disagree??

There arises no question over the verity of the statement that an ever number of people nowadays, owing to globalization and
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slew of factors, prefer foreign nations as their place of work and residence. Agreed, it has got scores of
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aspects to offer yet some unfavourable ones thrive in its lap. The upcoming paragraphs will discuss both praiseworthy points and shortcomings in a more specified way. Immigrating to other countries for the purpose of living and working over there prove to be
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in many a case. In the
place, apart from developing and sharpening communication skills, it gives a person an insight into other cultures and makes him understand
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, beliefs and rituals of foreign nationals.
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understanding goes a long way in developing global contacts and fashions a
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mind set
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that is
truly international. It is imperative to note that in today's business world,
proves to be a great asset and assists in tapping the unlimited potential persisting in foreign lands and
, makes nation achieve successful careers in a short span of time. A prime illustration is of immigrants from India, not least from Punjab and Gujarat state, who went to overseas nations including the US, England and Canada and have established themselves as business as well as political tycoons after getting acclimated to
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community, professional operations and others environments over there Notwithstanding the benefits, another side of the picture is rather grim. There is every possibility of landing in from another country being subjected to racial discrimination and rude as well as inconsiderate behaviour by the natives. Indeed, immigrant's distressing stories and painful life experiences abroad pertaining to their struggles in getting accepted ,both socially and professionally, and their victimization are evidence that it is not all rosy and one might have to get through mental trauma and physical hardships before settling. It may be added that
experiences, and the feelings of disintegration from families as well as friends, pushes a person towards loneliness and other issues
as stress and depression. 
, considering the fact that foreign market system ,as well as
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are unfamiliar, chances of business losses are quite high. At
, it can be summed up that no doubt there are some demerits of moving abroad for the purposes of work and living but the merits of it, which far outstrips the former, are surely not to be missed with a view to welcoming holistic growth.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation


To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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